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04 Dec 09
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Just wrote this poem. Should I publish it?
Squelching underpants etc.
They roamed free, stench a-waft
They roamed 'pon the lawn, the garage, up in the loft.
The underpants roameth wherever they please
Emitting the foulest of stenchy brown breeze.
They disgust but a few, what a rancid smell
An horrific aroma straight out of hell,
So friends, and kin, and family, I beg
Please lay off the curry and sprouts and egg.
Roameth they did, like a very fine wine,
They roameth so far, they began to shine!
Shineth they did, they shineth, like gloss!
A sheen so bright it couldn't give a toss.
It couldn't give a toss about it's neighbour, called Barry,
Whom no-one would marry...
Because he recently slipped in a pool of custard and bruised his knee.
Poor Barry.
(c) Mavis Handbag
Should I publish this poem?
Thanks in advance.
Squelching underpants etc.
They roamed free, stench a-waft
They roamed 'pon the lawn, the garage, up in the loft.
The underpants roameth wherever they please
Emitting the foulest of stenchy brown breeze.
They disgust but a few, what a rancid smell
An horrific aroma straight out of hell,
So friends, and kin, and family, I beg
Please lay off the curry and sprouts and egg.
Roameth they did, like a very fine wine,
They roameth so far, they began to shine!
Shineth they did, they shineth, like gloss!
A sheen so bright it couldn't give a toss.
It couldn't give a toss about it's neighbour, called Barry,
Whom no-one would marry...
Because he recently slipped in a pool of custard and bruised his knee.
Poor Barry.
(c) Mavis Handbag
Should I publish this poem?
Thanks in advance.
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Of course you should publish.
Very good and the last verse is touching on genius level!
WP Mavis! :D
Very good and the last verse is touching on genius level!
WP Mavis! :D
Many thanks - this is the sort of endorsement I was looking for... and admittedly, as an aspring new poet, crave for.
If you're good I might post a few more for consideration. Not too many though as I wouldn't want to spoil the surprise obviously.
If you're good I might post a few more for consideration. Not too many though as I wouldn't want to spoil the surprise obviously.
sparkmaster. 04 Dec 01:04
How much are you paying for ink cartidges?
what have ink cartridges got to do with the price of poetry, by the way? ty
How much are you paying for ink cartidges?
what have ink cartridges got to do with the price of poetry, by the way? ty
this gives me an even bigger horn than your usual posts
I'm pleased it had this effect on you.
To publish, you'll need to print, which will require ink, unless you mean digitally, in which case you already have.
i have 2 poems on short-story.net mavis but im not telling my name...one is called the butterfly and the soul though...hope u get on...
wonderful stuff. wilfred owen eat your heart out
So friends, and kin, and family, I beg
Please lay off the curry and sprouts and egg.
:^0
Please lay off the curry and sprouts and egg.
:^0
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