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04 Dec 09
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Just wrote this poem. Should I publish it?
Squelching underpants etc.
They roamed free, stench a-waft
They roamed 'pon the lawn, the garage, up in the loft.
The underpants roameth wherever they please
Emitting the foulest of stenchy brown breeze.
They disgust but a few, what a rancid smell
An horrific aroma straight out of hell,
So friends, and kin, and family, I beg
Please lay off the curry and sprouts and egg.
Roameth they did, like a very fine wine,
They roameth so far, they began to shine!
Shineth they did, they shineth, like gloss!
A sheen so bright it couldn't give a toss.
It couldn't give a toss about it's neighbour, called Barry,
Whom no-one would marry...
Because he recently slipped in a pool of custard and bruised his knee.
Poor Barry.
(c) Mavis Handbag
Should I publish this poem?
Thanks in advance.
Squelching underpants etc.
They roamed free, stench a-waft
They roamed 'pon the lawn, the garage, up in the loft.
The underpants roameth wherever they please
Emitting the foulest of stenchy brown breeze.
They disgust but a few, what a rancid smell
An horrific aroma straight out of hell,
So friends, and kin, and family, I beg
Please lay off the curry and sprouts and egg.
Roameth they did, like a very fine wine,
They roameth so far, they began to shine!
Shineth they did, they shineth, like gloss!
A sheen so bright it couldn't give a toss.
It couldn't give a toss about it's neighbour, called Barry,
Whom no-one would marry...
Because he recently slipped in a pool of custard and bruised his knee.
Poor Barry.
(c) Mavis Handbag
Should I publish this poem?
Thanks in advance.
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that's the job - too much beer! :^0 |
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How much are you paying for ink cartidges?
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£40 an hour.
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Poet Laureate material imo.
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a worthy effort
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Of course you should publish.
Very good and the last verse is touching on genius level! WP Mavis! :D |
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Many thanks - this is the sort of endorsement I was looking for... and admittedly, as an aspring new poet, crave for.
If you're good I might post a few more for consideration. Not too many though as I wouldn't want to spoil the surprise obviously. |
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sparkmaster. 04 Dec 01:04
How much are you paying for ink cartidges? what have ink cartridges got to do with the price of poetry, by the way? ty |
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actually pmsl...
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this gives me an even bigger horn than your usual posts
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I'm pleased it had this effect on you.
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purile garbage. Grow up
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come on then FACTS..give us your best.
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To publish, you'll need to print, which will require ink, unless you mean digitally, in which case you already have.
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i have 2 poems on short-story.net mavis but im not telling my name...one is called the butterfly and the soul though...hope u get on...
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:-) :-) :-)
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An unhealthy infatuation with sprouts imo.
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wonderful stuff. wilfred owen eat your heart out
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So friends, and kin, and family, I beg
Please lay off the curry and sprouts and egg. :^0 |
